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Location: Pennsylvania | It's still rough, because I only wrote it the other night, and it's still in the works.
I think I should add a bridge.
I think it's a pretty cool song, and I still don't know where "she lives by the sea" fits in. It just sounded cool, and a little voice kept telling me to build the song around that phrase for some reason...
But anyway... Let me know wht you think, and as allways... Thank you for listening.
Click Here To Listen To By The Sea
Here are the words...
~ By The Sea
~she stairs out the window
looking at the sky
she feels so alone
she starts to cry
she clutches the band
she wears in her hair
she waits for the man
who never is there
she never will be
what he wants her to be
she lives by the sea
she waits for a while
turns off the light
and then she goes
to sleep for the night
she dreams of a time
when everythings new
and nothing is old
and she's never blue
and love is for free
if she wants it to be
she lives by the sea
she wakes in the morning
to watch the sun rise
a new day beginning
makes her realize
that life has much more
much more to give
it's never too late
too late to live
she has to be free
thats the way it must be
she lives by the sea
she lives by the sea
she lives by the sea |
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Location: Buffalo,NY | bobc ,
I like it a lot. Nice guitar work and voice. I wish I had some of your talent !
I would love to hear a bridge as it would really add to the melody line that you have .
Regards,
Tom |
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Posts: 55
Location: Pennsylvania | Originally posted by Dr.Tom:
bobc ,
I like it a lot. Nice guitar work and voice. I wish I had some of your talent !
I would love to hear a bridge as it would really add to the melody line that you have .
Regards,
Tom Thank you Tom.
The hard art now is writing a bridge that sounds good without messing the song up... :) |
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Location: Buffalo,NY | Well you better hurry up with something before you have me making suggestions ; that would definitely be the ruin for your song :D .
Regards,
Tom |
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Location: Keepin' It Weird in Portland, OR | Very Nice!
I gotta learn the Finga-pickin' stuff, instead of just beating on my geetahs.
verse-chorus-verse-chorus-middle eight-verse-chorus
[ten-minute guitar solo, then chorus again]
Yeah, that's the formula. But what you've got sounds nice.
Who wants to follow the rules anyway! |
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Location: Midland, MI | I like it; reminds me of someone, but I can't put my finger on it. Not GC, either. Prine? Not really. Hrmm. This is going to bother me, now. Good job! |
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